Tuesday, March 10, 2015

SPOT THE ERROR 77


ORIGINAL: All vehicles parked in these premises are parked at the owners' risks.
MODIFIED: All vehicles in these premises are parked at owners' risks.
SIMPLIFIED: Park at your own risk.


ORIGINAL: Owners are advised not to keep any cash or items of value in their vehicles.
MODIFIED: Owners are advised not to keep any cash or valuable items in their vehicles.
SIMPLIFIED: Do not leave your cash and valuables in your vehicle.


The last paragraph seems to be more complex and difficult to revise. MAJEURE?
SIMPLIFIED: We will not be held responsible for any loss or damage to your vehicle.